Essay Feedback.

I am glad that the imagery in the essay is useful, and I agree that I could lengthen it at times and provide more in depth metaphors rather than 3 or 4 shorter ones. About the personal experience aspect of the essay. I do agree that the essay as a whole would be better if I were to provide my personal experiences, it adds depth and character to the essay. The changes needed for the essay will take some time to develop, but in all they will not be too hard. Thank-you for your feedback.